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  1. Dylan! First off, I would like to say that the design of your portfolio is very clean and cuts out nicely and simply for the readers to find exactly where to find your stories and nothing too crazy that might confuse the readers when they are checking out your profile. One thing I will ask though is why you have a picture of San Francisco for your cover page as well as the image there? Does it have something to do with the story; like do all of your stories in the portfolio going to be composed of the setting like that?

    I think that for the only current story that you have right now, I suggest more of an introduction as to who the characters are and why it should be a peak of interest! Right now, we follow a character and their usual day in a life. But what does the forest have to do with anything? Why does his father prefer polygamy? I think that if you provide some insider in the beginning as to how things come to the way they are, it would make the reader more interested and curious as to what's to come in the story! For the overall portfolio, I think it would be more interesting if you created a general theme (for example, like all the settings being in San Francisco, like your cover page), that way, there's some form of continuity that ties all the stories together and would make your portfolio a lot more interesting.

    Other than that, I think this is a great start to your portfolio, and look forward as to see that you will do in the future!


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